Thursday, 28 May 2015

Autumn Writing using Adverbs and Powerful Verbs!

Drifting in the Wind

Shrivelled leaves clumsily cling on for dear life as the wind yanks them roughly
The delicately crunchy leaves drift gently down into a pool of dew, waiting silently on the ground
Copper leaves cover the ground like a red velvet carpet waiting tenderly for the wind to carry them away


By Daniel


Autumn Leaves

Angrily, the leaves coasted down from the tree top to the frosty surface.
Happily, the dessert sand coloured leaf dived from the hard bark onto the land taken over by leaves.
Frightened red orange leaves hold on for sweet, sweet life, as the wind went through the trees bare bones.
The leaf gets carried to a cosy blanket to a new happy place in a grassy field.

By Joel



8 comments:

  1. WOW! Room 7 you have been busy with your writing

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  2. great Autumn leave poems Joel and Daniel.I liked your first sentence Joel.

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  3. WOW I really like how Daniel used some creative words, I think everyone enjoyed listening to our writing at assembly.

    Keep up the good work room 7!

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  4. Nice writing Joel you are almost as good as me.

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    1. Hi Adam! Hope intermediate is going well :)

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  5. Wow Room 7! What wonderful verbs and adverbs you are using! What excellent writing you are producing! Ka pai to mahi!
    Mrs Butler

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  6. Great verbs you are using in your writing. I loved your poem Joel.

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