Tuesday 10 November 2015

Writing: My Paradise...

My Paradise
Lines zip out to sea hoping something will bite fresh meat off silver hooks before wading back into the shore.
The smell of fresh bark from towering palm trees ripens the cold air.
Sea spray soaks my hair as I dive into the freezing water.
A sticky ice block sits in my hand as drips dive down and lay on the warm sand.
Footprints are seized by the current and carried away out to sea while sandcastles on the shore rear miniature tidal waves floating up the shore.
Lemonade and sandwiches are hand out at family picnics on the beach.
A roar on the sand indicates that waves of the tide are crashing in.
Rays of the bright sun peer over white candyfloss clouds.
The palm trees stand guard giving shade over happy sunbathers.
Relaxed, quiet, restful,
My Paradise
By Daniel Baker-Simpson
  
     Mount MaungaNui
                                             

   MY PARADISE
Giant fish slowly approach me looking for food
People screaming on the beach, having a fun time
Coconut water dripping down my chin from my mouth
People in and out of the lagoon water
Coral washed up on the golden sand
Lonely dogs cruise up and down the seashore
Coconuts fall to the ground leaving little trace
Foot prints make a path leading down to the clear water
Colossal palm trees shot out of the ground
Waves crash up over each other onto the hot sand
Clear, warm, fun
My Paradise


By Connor Burnside

Fiji



My Paradise
Stoney rock pinching my flesh skin.
 Crabs clap in a menacing and exuberant way.
Snails hiding and spying on nasty seagulls
Camouflaged fish disappearing through the ancient waters
Sponge sea plants swaying 
Saying“Ahhh! I have a lot of ouchie boo boos!"
Mussels perching on the bony rocks
Mysterious sea weed waves side to side like a narrow hand yelling “Goodbye, see you again, maybe?”
Pointy, rough and rocky
My Paradise...

By Kevin Tiddy
The Rock Pools
My Paradise
Reckless waves burst against the crumpled sand.
Frantic fish dance around the soothing water, next to the aged brick wall.
Birds tickle my hand as they peck reluctantly at the tiny stale bread crumbs.
Sweet aromas of freshly bake biscuits run wild among the eventful streets.
Striding inside of a volcano, not certain if ‘Diamond Head’ was dead or alive.
Amusing, mini shuttles providing trips to every boy and girl.
Stacks of pancakes with a thick drizzle of a berry sauce, topped off with sweet, fragrant blueberries, luring every customer closer.
Fireworks soar into the sky as the stunning sunset slowly fades away.
Inquisitive monkeys scream us awake as well as all the other animals that were trying to force their eyes open.

Entertaining, enjoyable and pleasurable

By Ella  J


Hawaii





11 comments:

  1. writing my paradise was so fun! thank you for giving us cool writing Miss Dagg!

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  2. Cool paridises daniel, Ella and Kev they really are cool paridises. Thanks Miss Dagg for the cool idea for writing!!!

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  3. Hi K7 hope u guys are going well Jas is giving me updates of what's going on if u guys are wondering I have made friends and I am enjoying school but I still miss Hinni also if u guys still want to see me go on YouTube to see my videos Toby will tell u the rest. Have a good year that is left of it 😀😭

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  4. Hi K7 hope u guys are going well Jas is giving me updates of what's going on if u guys are wondering I have made friends and I am enjoying school but I still miss Hinni also if u guys still want to see me go on YouTube to see my videos Toby will tell u the rest. Have a good year that is left of it 😀😭

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  5. Ella your paradise looks like fun. Could you you take me?

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  6. Thank you Miss Dagg for giving us such a great topic to write about :)

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  7. Hello K7 Shika here I have heard about you guys so much from Jas and Jas told me that some people are asking how I am I am good and if u guys want to see me go u Toby or Jas MISS YOU GUYS SO MUCH😭

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  8. Hello K7 Shika here I have heard about you guys so much from Jas and Jas told me that some people are asking how I am I am good and if u guys want to see me go u Toby or Jas MISS YOU GUYS SO MUCH😭

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    1. Hi Shika! Hope you have had a great end to the year and have settled in at your new school. You are definitely missed here at Hinuera, but Jas has kept us up to date on your news. Enjoy the summer holiday! :)

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  9. hi shika just letting u no I miss u so much. I hope u have made heaps of friends. all of our class is missing u heaps 2, and I forgot 2 say my bye!!

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